#16

I was in the grocery store when I heard the best overheard line Here it goes:

Why do hot dog buns have 8 in a package, when hot dogs come in packages of 10

#15

I am going to attempt to do a critical analysis of the one of the villanelle from our packet. I don't really like villanelle because you have to have two rhymes within the poem. I am not a fan a rhyming because I'm just not very good with them. I chose to do The Waking by Theodore Roethke. I found this poem interesting and easy to understand. As much as I don't like villanelle I couldn't really many errors in the poem it was written very precise. However, I did find some things I did not like about the poem. I noticed that in the last stanza the poem, the poet almost seems to rushed to conclude the poem. He kind of left the audience wanting more of an explanation of exactly what was the outcome the poem. An example of this probably would be "I wake to sleep, and take my waking slow" I think he plays with his use of words as he wrote that sentence. Because he could have been thinking about his own death or the death of someone else close to him. This poem kind of leaves his audience out in the open about certain things.

#14

At the start of the week, we were assigned to read the Villanelle and Pantoum packet. When I was reading the packet I was thinking this was going to be very hard for me, and indeed it was very difficult. I took me almost three hours to come up with a pantoum to bring to class today. But of course I did it the difficult way, instead of using all the lines from the sheet. I chose one line and came up with a poem using that one line. But I must say after I went through this overly exhausted process, I discovered that the Pantoum poem was not as bad as I thought it would. It was very difficult for me to get it to flow and come together and actually make sense. I guess you can say I actually found a formed poem that a liked. Well here is the poem I came up with.

A life filled with hardship
But I go on,
with purpose and dignity
praying for better days

But I go on.
Through acts of discouragements
praying for a better day
looking past all obstacles,

throughout acts of discouragements
negative influences and disappointments,
facing all obstacles
letting nothing stand in the way of my dream,

Negative influences and disappointments
arise on defenseless occasions.
But nothing stand in the way of my dream
Motivation is only necessary.

defenseless occasions arise
with purpose and dignity
motivation is only necessary
for a life filled with hardships.

I would really appreciate any comments and suggestions to make this a better pantoum.